Grenademan Vs Zombies is now professionally edited

Grenademan Vs Zombies is done.  Its book 3 out of 5 but I'm still publisihing it as a series in the new year alternating with Forever West.  Fiona Skye has done a fantastic job editing it.

I will be reading from it every other week in the podcast starting two saturday's from now, with short stories alternating after that.  Rereading it, its amazing how my first serious arc story (before I wrote it) of five parts works well.  Book 1, 3, 4, and 5 are all awesome.  I'm not sure about 2....its too close to 4....and I might just do it last or as an anthology of short stories at some point...rather than actually do it...but I do think I need to create a short novella of  Book 1 at least.

Regardless, its progress and MY what a difference an editor makes....

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Norne confronts Clarke and Emily.

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[Script] Tossing Grenades at Windmills - Page 30

EXT – KENSINGTON RESEARCH FACILITY - DAY

Hawkqueen, Inoria and Grenademan all look out at a large chain link fence. Inoria puts a small portable staircase on the ground that raises up and allows the three heroes to rush up and then rush down it. The portable staircase dissolves into vapor.

HAWKQUEEN

Handy that.

INORIA

That's what it is designed to do.

GRENADEMAN

DO YOU HAVE AN

(interrupted)

INORIA

(interupting)

Shut up! Do you have to be so loud?!

GRENADEMAN

(using an only barely perceptible lower tone of voice)

WHY SHOULD I NOT BE LOUD?

INORIA

Are you stupid? So we don't alert the bad guys that we're coming.

GRENADEMAN

BUT THE FORCES OF GOOD ARE INDESTRUCTABLE.

INORIA

No they aren't.

GRENADEMAN

YES, THEY ARE.

INORIA

What about people that aren't super heroes but are good, are they indestructible?

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HAWKQUEEN

He was the most powerful metahuman on earth in his day. He was a hero. He fought crime through the twenties and thirties. He was last seen during WWII. Everyone thought he was dead.

INORIA

Maybe its some other guy.

HAWKQUEEN

True. Its not like its the first time we've run into someone taking up someone else's costume, but I think that this is different...

INORIA

The voice?

HAWKQUEEN

Yes. Its just so....him. You'd have to hear the old recordings.

INORIA

Well if it IS him, that would be kind of bad, wouldn't it?

HAWKQUEEN

What are you implying?

INORIA

We've taken on some pretty tough bad guys before, but nothing on the 'world's most powerful caliber'. Maybe we should call in some backup.

HAWKQUEEN

Maybe. Alert the police for now with a heads up. We're going to do some homework.

Precyber Chapter 52

Emily and Clarke break into Aqua Noir.  They get help.

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[Script] Tossing Grenades at Windmills - Page 28

HAWKQUEEN

Alright then. Let's see what strangeness lurks in the mind of the man with the thumbtack head.

The video next to the device shows the earlier scene of the interrogation followed by scenes of the asylum. Very abbreviated.

HAWKQUEEN

That was horrible.

INORIA

Poor guy.

HAWKQUEEN

At least they didn't actually die.

INORIA

Enough to make him lose his marbles.

HAWKQUEEN

We need to find out what Thorne was actually up to. Anything in there that would give us any indications?

INORIA

None that I can tell.

HAWKQUEEN

Shadows....Doctor Shadows, can you believe it?

INORIA

Who is he?

HAWKQUEEN

Old Dead Guy. He wouldn't interest you.

INORIA

Obviously not so dead. Spill.

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HAWKQUEEN

I stand corrected. Hawk Eyre ho.

EXT – HAWK EYRE - DAY

The Hawk Eyre looms ahead and the hover car flys inside of it.

INT – HAWK EYRE HANGER - DAY

They take the unconscious Grenademan out. Inoria has a small robot come out, pick him up and lay him to a table.

INT – INORIA’S LAB - DAY

She points something that looks like an X-ray at his head.

HAWKQUEEN

What are you doing?

INORIA

I want to know where this guy comes from. Its against the law to pull his mask up, so I'm just going to read his mind instead.

HAWKQUEEN

Are you sure this is working this time?

INORIA

Yes.

HAWKQUEEN

Because last time you read their thoughts when they were 4 years old instead of two days in the past.

INORIA

Its working.

HAWKQUEEN

You're sure.

INORIA

I'm sure.

Precyber Chapter 51

Putting together the final peices.

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[Script] Tossing Grenades at Windmills - Page 26

GRENADEMAN

THE FORCES OF GOOD ARE INVULNERABLE. IF I AM VULNERABLE I CANNOT BE HARMED.

Inoria and Hawkqueen look at each other.

INORIA

I'll get the hovercar.

EXT. INSIDE THE HOVER CAR WHILE MOVING - DAY

Hawkqueen and Inoria go into their hover cycle, with Grenademan who accompanies them in the back seat. Inoria holds a small blinking device up to Grenademan’s temple…who promptly slumps unconscious.

HAWKQUEEN

Well, I’m impressed…pretty handy gizmo you made this time, what’s it do?

INORIA

Make crazy people go unconscious?

HAWKQUEEN

I meant how does it work.

INORIA

You'd get bored.

HAWKQUEEN

Try me.

INORIA

Right. Well see it works first with the principle that the human brain is connect-

HAWKQUEEN

Bored now.

INORIA

Told you.

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GRENADEMAN

GREETINGS FELLOW FIGHTER OF EVIL!

INORIA

(pauses)

OK. Cute in a...stupid...sort of way.

Inoria gets up and runs towards Hawkqueen.

INORIA

Mephistopheles...is he?

Hawkqueen stands over the bird and begins to heal it.

HAWKQUEEN

He'll be fine. I'm healing him. If they didn't insist I'd leave them behind. They'd just come anyway.

GRENADEMAN

WHO CAN RESIST FIGHTING THE FORCES OF EVIL?

HAWKQUEEN

Er....can I help you?

Grenademan stands and looks around awkwardly.

GRENADEMAN

JUST ADMIRING YOUR HANDY WORK.

HAWKQUEEN

Thanks.

INORIA

Can I keep him?

HAWKQUEEN

Are you sure you want to do that?

INORIA

He may be hurt.

Precyber Chapter 50

BOOM!

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INORIA

Heck if I know. I'd like a male super hero closer to my age though. You know how hard it is to find a good date. Most men, heroic or not are just crazy. Anyway...

HAWKQUEEN

Done now? Good. Take the owl. Amber, Mephistopheles get the chicken…I’ll take the Duck!

RED DIAMOND BACKED GROUND HEN

Red Dia-crap! It’s Hawkqueen!

SPOTTED WOOD OWL

That means Inoria can’t be far behind!

Spotted Wood Owl looks around desperately as Inoria activates a device on her belt and teleports behind him. Then she reaches back and slams him in the jaw, knocking him back.

INORIA

Quite correct …quite correct!

A fight ensures as the two hawks begin to attack the chicken, who desperately tries to fight back. Duck Avenger takes out a pistol and fires it at one of the hawks, wounding it as Hawkqueen charges up at him.

HAWKQUEEN

Oh you’ll pay for that you hypocrite….savior of birds indeed….

DUCK AVENGER

Put it on my …Bill….

The two of them scuffle and trade blows, but Hawkqueen cleans his clock as Inoria and the remaining hawk finish off the chicken in relatively short order. Grenademan gets his head unstuck from the wall and then falls back into Inoria. They collapse in a heap. Inoria gets an expression of attraction until he speaks.

[Script] Tossing Grenades at Windmills - Page 23

Grenademan tosses down two smoke grenades, filling the room with smoke. The bad guys shoot at Grenademan but miss horribly. Grenademan charges at Red Diamond Ground Hen. Grenademan misses and crashes into a patron. The three men in bird suits grab whatever they can find, trying to hit Grenademan with it but miss Grenademan who ducks, weaves and gets them to hit each other a few times.

GRENADEMAN

HAHA! NOTHING CAN STOP THE MIGHTY GRENADEMAN FROM VANQUISHING THE FORCES OF EVIL!

The smoke slowly clears as the bank teller, old man, and bank patrons have all been summarily knocked unconscious or beaten to a pulp while the three villains are still standing.

DUCK AVENGER

Right, well, if it looks like a duck, and it quacks like a duck, and it walks like a duck…I guess that must mean it’s a duck that’s about to Kick Your Ass.

Violent combat ensures, Grenademan dodging lots of blows, but overall getting the royal crap beaten out of him. He gets his pointy spiked helmet caught in a wall as they all proceed to take turns beating him.

Hawkqueen comes into the bank with her side kick Inoria and two of her hawks.

HAWKQUEEN

Looks like Duck Avenger again. Man I hate these guys, they make me feel so completely cheesy that my power involves birds.

INORIA

Comes with the territory.

HAWKQUEEN

Who’s the new guy?

Precyber Chapter 49

Shadow Leader advocates something very dangerous...and suspicious.

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[Script] Tossing Grenades at Windmills - Page 22

DUCK AVENGER

Are you referring to my erstwhile friend in the white?

GRENADEMAN

THAT IS RIGHT, FOUL PERPATRATOR OF FELONIUS FOWLNESS, I AM HERE TO FIGHT FOR TRUTH, JUSTICE, KINDNESS, HAPPINESS, NICENESS AND THE RIGHT OF THE AVERAGE CITIZEN TO ENJOY A HOT FUDGE SUNDAY, IF ANY SAID CITIZEN WANTS TO HAPPEN TO ENJOY A HOT FUDGE SUNDAY. I SHALL ACCOMPLISH THIS BY UNLEASHING THE MIGHT OF MY RIGHTEOUS GRENADES UPON YOU IN ALL THEIR HOLY FURY.

DUCK AVENGER

I’ll have you know, good sir, that this is not a chicken, but in fact a highly dangerous Red Diamond Ground Hen.

GRENADEMAN

HE LOOKS LIKE A CHICKEN TO ME.

DUCK AVENGER

Well I assure you, he is not a chicken, and you are hurting his feelings.

GRENADEMAN

OH, I DIDN’T MEAN TO HURT HIS…WAIT A MINUTE, YOU WON’T FOOL ME WITH YOUR EVIL TRICKY WAYS…BAD GUYS DON’T HAVE FEELINGS…PREPARE TO FEEL MY WRATH!

DUCK AVENGER

Right…get him boys. Let’s teach him some political correctness with extremely violent prejudice!

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SPOTTED WOOD OWL

No it is not! All of this money will go to a good cause, anonymously donated to bird sanctuaries in the lower 48 states…minus a small collectors fee for our environmentally conscious services of course.

DUCK AVENGER

Of course, saving the environment can be terribly expensive….

Duck Avenger steps up to the Bank Teller.

DUCK AVENGER

And I’ll take all the cash in that drawer.

BANK TELLER

You’ll never get away with this!

DUCK AVENGER

Yeah? And who’s going to stop me?

The front glass doors burst into shards of glass as GRENADEMAN comes charging in, wearing gaudy costume with inverted thumbtack like helmet, coupled with dozens upon dozens of brightly colored but tiny grenades dangling from all portions of his body and a bright silver cape. As he charges through the glass doors, patrons begin shrieking in pain and removing unseen shards of glass from their clothing.

GRENADEMAN

GREETINGS CITIZENS! I AM THE MIGHTY GRENADEMAN!

Grenademan strikes a dramatic pose.

GRENADEMAN

I AM HERE TO RESCUE YOU FROM THE VILE FORCES OF THE CHICKENMASTER!

Duck Avenger is shocked at first, and then shakes his head and moves over to the man in the Chicken Suit.

Precyber Chapter 48

Things move forward.

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BANK TELLER

Well, you’re at the right place to do it.

The Bank Teller takes the deposit slip.

BANK TELLER

You didn’t quite add these numbers up right.

OLD MAN

Eh? I’ll have you know I was an accountant for 25 years before I retired, and if there is one thing I know, it’s numbers.

Three figures appear at the entrance of the bank; one dressed like a Duck (DUCK AVENGER), one like a chicken but with bright red diamonds in the feathers (RED DIAMOND BACKED HEN), and the other is dressed like an owl (SPOTTED WOOD OWL).

DUCK AVENGER

Yes, I know numbers too.

Duck Avenger fires gun into the ceiling.

DUCK AVENGER

All right everyone; this is a hold up in the name of oppressed waterfowl everywhere.

Duck Avenger begins taking money and jewels from various patrons, while the other two help.

DUCK AVENGER

Now I’ll have you know that this is no common run of the mill hold up, no sir. Is it Spotted Wood Owl?

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ISAAC

Cool!

Fred Noble looks at Frank a little suspiciously.

Frank ignores him and proceeds to toss the smoke grenade at the same pile. Smoke covers a wide area. A wind picks up and blows the smoke back at everyone in the test area. They start coughing.

FRANK

Note to self-Obtain gas mask. Now testing sleep grenade.

FRED

SLEEP grenade? Is that safe?

FRANK

Perfectly. oops.

Frank accidentally drops the grenade. A large cloud covers them all and they fall asleep.

Screen goes black.

Some time later, Frank wakes up with Fred standing over him, visibly annoyed. He points to two labels on the grenades marked, "Flash" and "Explosive".

FRED

You can test those when the kids aren't around.

FRANK

Er...right.

INT. BANK - DAY

Camera shows a large bank bustling with people. There is a large vault visible in the back behind the tellers, and a lined cordon shows several people waiting. An old man, waiting in line walks up to a bank teller.

OLD MAN

I want to deposit my money.